The best i could do for you is an english to italian translation... so i can't help you!
Anyway i'm a "writer" too, and i can tell you wath i think about the things you posted/will post.
I find that Goblins! is a nice idea! But the piece you posted suonds a bit "dry": for wath you are writing? A book or for something to put in the web? In the second case that could be favourable, but not for a book...
This is only my opinion, and you can don't mind about it...
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