Well here goes!
I'm listening more to what this sound could be, thatn at what it is right now.
You do need some more instruments. The changes in the rhythm are intentional I think and are in a right place, but you'd need some background (something like the pipes, or at least a harmonica) that would play a simillar tune, but not change the rhythm at that point.
It does need a bit work, but I shows potential!
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