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[IberianWolf]

well, I might as well post one of mine... <.< not much though.


Eden Is Burning

Divine meaning or the conspiring doom?
Could this be the meaning, to be none at all?
Let these wounds heal and with time face the truth
What proof have you of our rise or our fall?
The privilege of failure seems distant to you
Open your eyes and you'll see you're the fool

Touch all the stars and count them to sleep
Give me a reason for angels to weep
Bleed all your sorrows or drink them away
Our God's its own end and we are the pain

Why is it that all the right things feel wrong?
We brought down the leader... dead all along


I know it sucks, but it's really good comparing to my first poems... well, tell me what you think, please.


By the way Iowa i liked your poems but they lacked rythm in my opinion. very good open poems nonetheless. oh, and can't you just put your poems in a disk? and move them from one computer to the other.

Cloudy, you rule man, hahaha. gingerbread ducks was awesome!


PS: Iowa, might I ask how old you are?